Critique Me, Freak Me

by mtmynd

Posted to Action Poetry on 2001-08-17 08:22:00

critique me
like you would
your loved one
and tell me how
i feel
i look
i cook
i kneel
i spell
i talk
i walk
i smell
these things are
important to my
well being
well of dreams
well of consciousness
and how they
play
say
all day
in my way
i must know
how you know
how you interpret
those very things
thru your minds eye
i can see where
you
are
coming
from
know
how you are
when you say those things
o! those sweet and sour things
all caked in chinese philosophies
that whirl my mind and drop me
to my egoless knees without a breeze
there!
i feel
i kneel
i give
i live
for only
those words
that
embrace
erase
partly trace
your words
your thoughts
your o!pinyuns
across my mental
T R I B U T A R Y ,
V O C A B U L A R Y
that i see in you.



heave the ho’
and go, man, go
but if you’re slow
i’ll let you know

—-

(jesus died upright)

pontius pontificator

—-





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