wanta
by picasso
Posted to Action Poetry on 2002-06-28 08:01:00
Parent message is 220351
please take this as constructive critisism from a fellow litkicker. when reading this poem i really felt like it was one big poetry cliche. i felt like instead of simplifiing your words you tried to use bigger and better ones.
if it can be said simply. say it that way.
simply…my opinion.
~P