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by zen_

Posted to Action Poetry on 2003-09-21 21:32:00

Parent message is 516599
obviously.

Second, it’s VERY dense (i.e. compact) in illustration and in context. You’ve taken me somewhere with your work. I like it. It’s a ride down PCH in a Porsche Spider at 120. Do we sail off the side of the mountain, or do we make it home safely. Alas, I don’t feel it’s quite finished. I think you have a better ending in you. Don’t eat or sleep for three days, then ask yourself: where am I taking us?

(BTW, Whose looking to publish?)