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by minna

Posted to Poetry on 2001-08-31 19:32:00

Parent message is 28017
I feel that if you were more honest with yourself, and if you really spent some time with your emotions, what is obviously driving you to write, then you would define a much clearer and distinct voice within your poetry. If you take some time going deeper within the source of this poem then, I believe, specificity and more vivid and evocative language will arise and will undoubtedly shock you. As it is, this poem seems to be more like lyrics but however only part of a song. I am curious to read more. …..a few hours later: This is what I really mean… I think that this poem doesn’t really affect me much because it doesn’t go beyond what is…get what I mean???

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