very good title! some suggestions
by Bobthegashuffer
Posted to Poetry on 2002-12-16 14:37:00
Parent message is 341214
One of the best poems I’ve read which has been posted here–however you need to dig deeper into the meat of the idea–why are the ideals of liberalism out of reach? is it a metaphysical reason, human weakness, or what?–so keep it personal and abstract, using your same symbolism and allegories, but give in-depth illustrations into you’re diagnosis of the cause.