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by jpoet112

Posted to Poetry on 2002-12-24 18:56:00

Parent message is 346375
it is a quiet

gray

* good. i like the idea of a quiet gray *

like the wish for snow
without the premonition

* i don’t know if premonition works here. like the wish for snow without forthought. hmmm. it just seemed odd to me. maybe thats just a personal thing. *

blows so gentle
animating leaves
of eucalyptus

stand-in scent of pine
no mountain breeds
no winter
no particular season * i was a bit confused with this passage, but still liked it. the repetition. no particular season . . the neutrality *

neutral
like the falling
in the woods

all alone * nice ending. the whole tree falls in the forest thing. the uncertainty. again, neutrality. nice tie back . .

overall, i like this *