Thanks for the feedback.

by llyncilla

Posted to Poetry on 2003-07-17 08:15:00

Parent message is 486201
I think it’s interesting that I got two mostly diverging critiques. I agree with Kairo to an extent in the first monster stanza and with you on the last two; initially I envisioned the poem as reading in a very choppy, jagged manner, but I think it got too choppy in the first stanza. I’m going to wait a coupla days and refocus attention on it when I can see it again freshly.