what i think
by ellipsis
Posted to Poetry on 2003-07-26 21:36:00
Parent message is 491094
i read through your poem and stopped at these lines:
“I cannot be measured
Like the distance between 0 & 1″
and i think that these two could use a little extra attention. i could see what you were trying to say with the entire piece, and feel that if you were to focus on these lines a bit, you could use them to say much more than they already do.
i guess that what i’m trying to say is that those two lines have inspired me to write. i’m getting a lot of ideas based on just those two.