very nice
by ellipsis
Posted to Poetry on 2003-09-08 10:51:00
Parent message is 511060
i really like this poem, though i couldn’t help but visualize commas and semicolons here and there. i think i’m just hung up on the potential of commas to work with the flow and rhythm of poems, and think that semicolons are great punctuation mixed in with the commas. but overall, i really like this piece.