you’re right

by smhppp

Posted to Stories on 2002-05-17 10:44:00

Parent message is 187019
carmen, you’re absolutely right. but i’m at the point where i’m not sure if what i want is an explosion of words to open with or not…

the intent was to sort of jolt the reader, hence the opening line of at least what i consider to be a serious novel “This ain’t no thing.” my problem i know is that i know it so well, i read thru a lot of the obstacles in it. ideally i think the reader should go thru this first chapter pretty quickly and not think too much about it. there is absolutely meaning there, but the style is meant to convey an emotion…to introduce the reader to this person’s hectic thoughts and scattered ideas.

but i don’t want to scatter the reader. i’m going to take another look at it and see if i can add a bit more rhythm to it…i would definitely like to hear if you liked it any more on the second go-round.

i really appreciate the comments! this is great. thank you!

-s

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