dear Corbind

by judih

Posted to Stories on 2001-08-08 21:02:00

Parent message is 29051
You’ve definitely got a story going here.
The beginning is in need of serious editing, and that kinda slowed things down til you came to “It happened”. Jimmy’s story is effectively told, and my interest was held throughout.

Keep going!

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