sarah…

by jamelah

Posted to Stories on 2002-10-17 06:37:00

Parent message is 305052
i liked this. i’m not very good at offering helpful suggestions, but i’d perhaps like to see minnie’s space described a little bit more at the beginning. maybe show a little bit more (like a paragraph or so) of her alone, talking to her bird. i think it might help draw a clearer line between what her world is when her husband is gone, and what it is when he’s home.

overall, though, i think this piece is very well done. good work.

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