browncat

by shyster

Posted to Stories on 2003-11-01 08:23:00

Parent message is 535847
your writing style really worked for me. Had the quality of thought. this bit:

Looking back I see bare back trees and broken brown red leaves turning to sludge in frozen and muddy darkness of under-hedge secret hells of mice and wood lice and gnarled brown back badger, who sniffs at his prey clawing grimly at the dankness of his set.

is great. I liked the imagery. I thought you stumbled occasionally from the brilliance of the above down into what I would regard as fairly standard writing. I think you should tweak this baby for full flow potential cause it is very good.

Or just leave it, up to you.

cheers,

c

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