hahaha

by ellipsis

Posted to Stories on 2004-01-16 14:08:00

Parent message is 583273
i had to reread a few parts just to make the laughter repeat. funny story, bennie, but um… suggestion… could you make it longer? and maybe ease it in at the beginning, and bring it to a close, rather than present it like a gush of tale laid out on the webpage background? i think the style of this story needs more length, and that the beginning and ending need to taper a little, but other than that, it’s a great read.

or maybe you were going for “gush of tale” style. in which case, ignore me, like so many do. it’ll be good for your health.

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