“I bet your cold.”
by frontal-abstraction
Posted to Stories on 2004-07-18 17:57:00
Parent message is 681881
In the first draft, after ‘I bet your cold’ my money was on the table betting that your character was talking with the dead. I was back and forth before then, between a dying relationship and someone actually being dead. I care more about your character in your revision, all for the spider. Brilliant!