Litkicks Message Board Archive

nice one

Posted to Poetry




Harry but I would like to be your editor...ifn' you don't mind...

twikled - twinkled
pail - pale (unless it had something to do with a bucket)
pedals - petals (unless it had something to do with a bike)
pridictable - predictable
and take the 'd' outta 'kicks'
not sure what you meant by "exist sigh", 'exit sign' perhaps?

but other than those small things I found this to be very uplifting and poetic.

Oh, and btw, sorry about my last post to you, I was sidetracked by a troll...

SooZen