Damned by the Political Correctness Police
You poem tries to make an important point -- but it is a dicey issue that requires something other than a full-frontal attack. [Ooops, that sound like a rape metaphor.]
You poem is too much in the sphere of prose. And as prose, you would need to fully flesh out the issue with more care and less passion. Or else the P. C. Police are gonna get ya. And when that happen, all rationality goes out the door, and no one will save you.