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after due thought and deliberation......

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hello violet9

I think lilacs
Summer
Winter
Bridesmaid
and Favor...but again, i say, the Technicolor word is cliche...i'd be so happy if you could lose it...
( a thought came that perhaps you could substitute Disney, which, yes, is a well known idea, but ...Disney daydream is such a pleasantly rhythmic alliteration...what do you think?)

The poem about your parents is the next choice.

If you can only go with one...i say consult the I Ching...

(allusions in Lilacs...the fog on the floor is reminiscent of J.Alfred Prufrock, and the 'pretense' rang my bell from the Utterances board...isn't that where you dialogued with someone?)

when's the deadline?
j