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First draft

Posted to Action Poetry




I may be playing devil's advocate here but I prefer the first draft after viewing both..it's all a matter of opinion anyway..I like a little mysique..the second one is a bit more literal and I liked the egg imagery in the first.. it conjures up that phrase "walking on egg-shells" i.e. fragility, a delicate line etc..anyway both are nice pieces of work but I prefer the first..just my little 'ol two cents :)