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this is nice. i especially like:

"Construct a wall of fire
that glows like champagne stardust"

that is just awesome. also,

"flowing staccato symphony songs of humanity"
quite a contradiction of terms, but it works. 'songs' would be better left out, though. 'flowing staccato symphony of humanity' just seems to roll better on the tongue.

nice work. =)