criticism
Posted to Poetry
by nocturne 17 on 2002-11-06 17:39:00
i'd be interested in your work exploring modern haiku. you have a certain stripped quality i think could really shine in modern haiku.
if i have anything to remark about this poem it would be: i like the bare, simple aspects although i dont think it works as a whole. it's incomplete. however you have a spark of something, an energy, a linear way of thinking that interests me.
