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sea mine haiku edited PC

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The rusty mine sways
dead on a couch of spume.
No storm clouds now

haiku queries:

What's the thinking about the use of articles, 'the', 'a' etc. in Haiku? Also, I feel it would be more effective to write, 'storm clouds have passed' but is perfective aspect a big no-no?