critique-ing the poetry but commenting on the content (because the content in this case IS the poem, I think)
I like this piece because it's real. Tangible sentiments expressed crisply. I want to say that peace in isolation is easy and that finding it in the melé of real life is THE key...reduntant as critisism I know, but poetry is meant to invoke response right? And that is my response.
...Liked the exhalation/exhausted thing.