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okay okay

Posted to Poetry




(i really take this critque thing seriously since my current creative writting class is a waste of time and does nothing for me, so thanks)

i can handle no more
metaphors for tears

no more rain springing
from the eyes of some
pained innocent

no more takeovers of
an undisturbed night
by overpowering pain

no more visions of delicate petals
being ripped from the comfort
of their home in beauty

no more oceans that smuther
and leave me lying useless

i can only handle the small ache
that i run my fingers over
in the cold of this kitchen.


BUT- is it any good?