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Posted to Poetry
by fabled construct on 2003-12-16 01:12:00
i'm thankful for the comments, and as im relatively new to this, and this poem being probably the 10th i've even attempted, it helps a great deal. so, if i would spend more time on what i have, do you think there would be something substantial at the end?....
>In the house, will herself lay.
erm,, that line, i thought, with the comma, sort of produced a double meaning, kind of
it asks a question almost, and then it also sounds like a labourious movement, that should otherwise be simple...
do you agree?
i don't know if i'm getting my point across too well...
