your work made my breathing faster. it's true. this 'is' action.
I cannot say that the substance is good, but the way you wrote it, is.
about the substance: should a good action poem need to be complicated with life, is a poem that makes your blood rise higher than the others the better poem?
I haven't read anything on it yet, this has been my first.
or is there no great poem? then it means you cannot improve it anymore? that's wrong, I believe !
do you have thoughts to say on this...