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thanks for the suggestion. i honestly think i'd have a hard time cutting the last stanza but it's certainly something to keep in mind. i wouldn't want to cut it partly because i would want the poem to have 6 stanzas instead of five.i see the turn of the poem taking place between the 3rd and 4th (well perhaps 'turn' is the wrong word- but the place where the motivation of the speaker is revealed? maybe it doesn't come across that way. i actually really dislike the first line of the 4th stanza but i'm having a hard time changing it...) but i'd like to keep the symmetry nonetheless. i don't think switching the last two stanzas would work but perhaps cutting the last and adding a fifth...

in the mean time i look forward to reading your work!