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hmm

Posted to Poetry




i read your poem again just now, and i think that yes, it needs a sixth, summing stanza... it's that its current sixth doesn't maintain the same flow as the rest of the poem. i like the way it's exclusive of the other stanzas (it doesn't begin with the end of the previous stanza's line like the rest do), and this, along with the way it makes an end statement about the subject of the poem from specifically your point of view, works very well. its rhythm and flow are just markedly different from the rest.

but at any rate, i look forward to reading more from you.