i'm so grateful
for these words, incredibly so, they mean lot...thanks Mie.
yes, i'm glad the sadness came through the way it did.
i've actually altered this poem a bit since posting it. it's the second stanza being a little, like you said, different in rhythm to the first one, so it's goint to evolve I hope.
those last four lines are my favourite.
thanks for these kind words.