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i had a hard time linking all of the stanzas to a common theme. and one of the last lines ("but it's all nothing") seems to make a comparison from the thought that "it's all nothing" to the thoughts of the preceding stanzas (because you used the word "but"), but i didn't see good use of comparison there. so i really think that the word "but" is unjustified. still, the stanzas seem disconnected from one another.