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this is gorgeous

Posted to Utterances




Was this originally written in verse?

I think there's something about my brain that enables me to grasp a whole paragraph at once, but not a whole stanza unless it's written a certain way

f'rinstance, the "cunt" post, I would've versed it this way:

he was an utter cunt of a shit,
a self proclaimed decadant demi-god,
an insignificant slimey scum
with seeped blood stains on his bicuspids.
the dude was downright stunned by his own delapidated appearance...
he thought it humorous to disrobe
to disco music
beneath a rotating globe strobe
while engaging in mastabatory self mutilation
as if he had a rapt audience....

but he was a destitute diletante...
a shit of an utter cunt...
his performance reeked like a stagnant creek
with wads of trash floating downstream
and nobody even bothered to scream,
"get off the fucking stage,
you stillborn crap stricken loser...
you stunted slump of a scum cunt"...
because nobody cared to watch...

and why would they?
he was a damn scab of a swindler...
a shit of an utter failure ...
crud on legs...
a coagulation of flushed excrement.

~-~
for reasons I can't explain, that way up there is easy for me to grasp.

Maybe I only understand my personal system of rhythm notation



this is gorgeous

Posted to Utterances




Was this originally written in verse?

I think there's something about my brain that enables me to grasp a whole paragraph at once, but not a whole stanza unless it's written a certain way

f'rinstance, the "cunt" post, I would've versed it this way:

he was an utter cunt of a shit,
a self proclaimed decadant demi-god,
an insignificant slimey scum
with seeped blood stains on his bicuspids.
the dude was downright stunned by his own delapidated appearance...
he thought it humorous to disrobe
to disco music
beneath a rotating globe strobe
while engaging in mastabatory self mutilation
as if he had a rapt audience....

but he was a destitute diletante...
a shit of an utter cunt...
his performance reeked like a stagnant creek
with wads of trash floating downstream
and nobody even bothered to scream,
"get off the fucking stage,
you stillborn crap stricken loser...
you stunted slump of a scum cunt"...
because nobody cared to watch...

and why would they?
he was a damn scab of a swindler...
a shit of an utter failure ...
crud on legs...
a coagulation of flushed excrement.

~-~
for reasons I can't explain, that way up there is easy for me to grasp.

Maybe I only understand my personal system of rhythm notation