i thought it was a very cool poem
Posted to Poetry
by Elgi on 2004-03-21 07:07:00
this stanza (i think thats what it is called) really cought my attention because you seemed to be going one way with your poem (maybe a loss of innocence?) and then you shook thinks up with...
Your smooth, empowering confidence
penetrated my tingling, silent body
like electric currents,
while my entranced eyes feasted
upon the marvelous mystique
and beauty of your movement.
...this sounds like a huge entanglement of sexual enuendo (or im just a pervert). the cool thing about it is that you start your poem and it builds up to that part and then the reader is trapped till the end. very cool indeed.
now about the meaning of your poem...i probably didnt catch your true literal meaning considering im (dumb) not you. i dont usually get the same meaning as everyone else and im usually wrong about the meaning of the poem when i do think ive gotten it. sorry about that but ill try harder next time...and until then...adios!
