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L3 is really explaining L2. In haiku, and poetry in general, explaining like this really doesn't work. It creates a dependance that should be eliminated, i.e., if each line can't stand alone, and doesn't add anything to the poem, it needs to go. I think most people would associate "first kiss" and "first beer" with positive images, especially with the Rock resonance. However, explaining the emotion, i.e., prescribing it for the audience really doesn't work.