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L2 explains L1, or magnifies it, and therefor one, or the other, can be taken out. I suggest


three shades in one stone
in the palm of her hand

or

three bands on one stone
in the palm of her hand

Work with it. I'm sure you'll find the exact words, as well as the right resonance with the first line to use. Focus on the two images, and go from there.