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Wow, that pulled me right in. Coherent, engaging, gave me a smile.

If it’s ok to comment (I hope, heh), here goes.

The title doesn’t do the dialogue justice. Something about “imagined” in there. Maybe cause it had a “real” not imagined feeling. (and I know intrinsically it comes from your imagination.)

I like: “spinning
B-enough to make anyone crazy.”

I don’t like: “the moon is crazy, always has been.”

That’s my only tweak on the text.

Thanks for the read =)

MCRantvant