i wasn't trying to be either
but it seems the original post has been edited to remove the author's request for critiques. somnambulist had written that this poem might seem too structured for Action, because it was written in iambic pentameter.
i really like the poem a lot! it cuts thru the bullshit of the phoney-baloney hipster poetry scene and lays it on the line. all i was saying is that it read to me more like trochaic pentameter than iambic. and a defective foot is not a critique, it's just a looser structure. so i think the poem fits quite nicely here on Action.
...as does a critique, but only because of the author's request. but i can see why it looks like i was just being mean, now that the request has been edited out. ;)