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well, I like this

Posted to Poetry

poem very much.
I like the idea of the permanance of's something I can really play with in my mind....and it renders the whole poem something very concrete yet see through, like glass.

I love the word mirth and I think it works very well here.

If anything, I'd recommend changing the word "speared" in the last line.

smeared maybe?

at any rate, it's a fine piece methinks.