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excellent criticisms

Posted to Poetry




yes, I stole lines; I was writing for a workshop where that was the assignment. The damn braces and all that lives is holy is also stolen from Blake. So you are right just cutting it all out is the best advice. Actually I don't really even need the bits of actually ads to make my point so were I to revise, I would take them out too. I just wanted to float this one out there for the ideas in it.