i think this has a gorgeous, mysterious atmosphere, mostly down to the poem's speaker and that unique rhythm and tone i read it in. I loved the second stanza, it sounds like a child's pov almost, God is YELLOW!, naieve and sweet.
This part i loved too;
Get rid of those horrible reds
you picked up in Tahiti
like the syphilis and dark women
and childish symbolism and myths.
reminds me of someone i know, that went to india a straight and came back a hippy.
Thnaks for sharing.