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some observations

Posted to Poetry and Politics




for me, not your best piece...i think you don't expand nearly enough on the two themes that i would like to see more spoken of - the notion of corporate oligarchy and the financial gains from holding presidancy - not for the president, but for the machines that run them

now, i suspect you wanted to focus more on the independence day aspect...if this is what you want, then don't tease with the other stuff, but expand upon the first part of the piece

this is really two (or three) different pieces i think...i believe you should pick one and write it