i really enjoyed how, after the question "where are you?", you inserted different thoughts--maybe wavelengths is a better word--and the number of left parentheses helps tie in each thought/wavelength; and then the pigeons scatter. overall, i got the idea of many different thoughts weaving in and out of one another, and then, of the pigeons--thoughts--clearing. very effective.
i really don't have any criticism. i just really admire your organization.