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Eternal plea,
met for a while in existence,
with backward smiles
glimmering in the sea,
a cruel intent upon the dubious
and a hand that no longer fed.

Perhaps without a smile this time,
civil, but unchanging and like us
not wanting to disturb,
devoid of any show, strange,
when his glory came to us
but a history ago, short long to

Just a little saving, will not that do?
Or is the running unpleasant, and,
our hiding unkind?
But it was not we,
a secret Jew, in troubled narrative,
perhaps he smiles still,