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The Haiku Board

Try out your original haikus here. If you would like to be critiqued, please say so (PC=please critique, or NC=no critique).

kkizer offers some useful background information on haiku :

The classic form of haiku generally involves the seasons or some simple, unadulterated (not overly verbose) description of life or an instant image before the poet. The three poets generally considered to be masters of the haiku tradition are Basho (1644-94), Buson (1716-83) and Issa (1763-1827). They differed greatly: Basho was spiritual and poignant, Buson was more artistic and Issa was more emotional and humane.

What's interesing to note is that the commonly accepted 5-7-5 syllable style was never used by any of them. In fact, according to my research, the only 5-7-5 syllable style I could discover was as part of a larger poem called a RENGA, which was a collaborative poem. The first poet wrote the first verse in the 5-7-5 form, and each following poet had a different structure to follow.

For more on the history of haiku, please read this page.


her head on my chest--PC by pottygok Nov 29, 2003 6:43 PM
her birthday party--PC by pottygok Nov 29, 2003 6:39 PM
cold potatoes--PC by pottygok Nov 29, 2003 6:31 PM
In an alien land by DarkMatta-Legend Nov 29, 2003 12:00 AM
chill by mtmynd Nov 28, 2003 8:11 PM
Paint by artguy Nov 28, 2003 2:42 PM
someone waltzing through the hall by judih. Nov 28, 2003 2:04 AM
parking lot--PC by pottygok Nov 26, 2003 9:49 PM
empty lot by manzeken revived Nov 28, 2003 7:42 PM
snowy lot by manzeken revived Nov 28, 2003 7:47 PM
sunrise--PC by pottygok Nov 26, 2003 9:44 PM
This by noangel Dec 1, 2003 4:28 PM
oh dear, i've really made a mess in my trousers with this one... by JacopoBelbo84 Nov 26, 2003 10:32 AM
Where credit is due by noangel Nov 26, 2003 7:51 AM
thanks by dreamofconsciousness Nov 26, 2003 10:01 PM
persist by rouge saint Nov 26, 2003 6:25 AM
auspicious connection by judih. Nov 25, 2003 7:56 PM
What am I (PC) by noangel Nov 25, 2003 3:26 PM
Pleasure by artguy Nov 25, 2003 5:26 PM
the body by zen_ Nov 25, 2003 8:55 PM
Good idea... by pottygok Nov 26, 2003 9:48 PM
what am i (pc) by ellipsis Nov 29, 2003 4:48 PM
less telling... by pottygok Nov 30, 2003 12:14 PM
a-ha!(PC) by noangel Nov 29, 2003 12:53 PM
... by pottygok Nov 30, 2003 12:12 PM
Revised (PC) by noangel Nov 30, 2003 9:41 PM
... by pottygok Dec 1, 2003 10:57 PM
What Am I revised again (PC) by noangel Dec 2, 2003 10:22 AM
... by pottygok Dec 3, 2003 7:09 AM
Life Lesson (PC) by noangel Nov 25, 2003 3:25 PM
knowledge by artguy Nov 25, 2003 6:20 PM
... by pottygok Nov 26, 2003 9:46 PM
Take two(PC) by noangel Nov 29, 2003 1:14 PM
... by pottygok Nov 30, 2003 12:16 PM
Take Three(PC) by noangel Nov 30, 2003 4:40 PM
... by pottygok Dec 1, 2003 11:08 PM
Thinking Back a Bit by noangel Nov 25, 2003 3:22 PM
forgotten cigarette--PC by pottygok Nov 24, 2003 8:50 PM
tendrils by zen_ Nov 25, 2003 9:01 PM
last cigarette--PC by pottygok Nov 24, 2003 8:45 PM
date cancelled--PC by pottygok Nov 24, 2003 8:45 PM
cold, colder by zen_ Nov 25, 2003 9:07 PM
sleep by dreamofconsciousness Nov 24, 2003 7:59 PM
calm drizzle--PC by pottygok Nov 23, 2003 2:35 PM
Pottygok, you may be by zen_ Nov 23, 2003 5:33 PM
I thank you. by pottygok Nov 24, 2003 9:47 PM
Hey, you don't have to get namasty about it by zen_ Nov 25, 2003 8:52 PM
Two Tokyo Haikus by in_earth Nov 23, 2003 2:32 AM
well done by zen_ Nov 23, 2003 3:53 AM
tea alone--PC by pottygok Nov 22, 2003 9:41 PM
Interesting by zen_ Nov 23, 2003 3:29 AM
dark star by Andeh Nov 22, 2003 10:46 AM
bodhisattva by Andeh Nov 22, 2003 10:51 AM
without a trace (dos) by Andeh Nov 22, 2003 10:58 AM
stolen kisses by DarkMatta-Legend Nov 22, 2003 12:14 AM
le printemps gele by Knip Nov 21, 2003 11:51 PM
astronomical physical miracle by DarkMatta-Legend Nov 21, 2003 11:37 PM
Down the bottomless well by DarkMatta-Legend Nov 21, 2003 11:31 PM
smile of moon--PC by pottygok Nov 21, 2003 11:30 AM
nice economy by zen_ Nov 23, 2003 3:35 AM
call from the hospital--PC by pottygok Nov 21, 2003 11:29 AM
well, by zen_ Nov 23, 2003 3:47 AM
mort by Emelia Nov 21, 2003 9:24 AM
gentle waters by DarkMatta-Legend Nov 21, 2003 11:45 PM
i love you by in_earth Nov 23, 2003 2:48 AM
Poetic me by DarkMatta-Legend Nov 20, 2003 7:27 AM
rain beneath the moon--PC by pottygok Nov 19, 2003 5:44 PM
rain taps the window--PC by pottygok Nov 19, 2003 5:43 PM
stormed willow branches--PC by pottygok Nov 19, 2003 5:43 PM
^ by rain70 Nov 19, 2003 11:46 AM
living on earth for a spell by judih. Nov 19, 2003 10:57 AM
Huh? by artguy Nov 19, 2003 11:06 AM
dark enough by judih. Nov 19, 2003 11:26 AM
Stars by artguy Nov 19, 2003 12:49 PM
eyes shot by judih. Nov 19, 2003 7:47 PM
seasonal by buddhabitch Nov 20, 2003 8:14 AM
return by zero hero Nov 21, 2003 8:38 PM
all night cram session by ellipsis Nov 19, 2003 3:56 AM
chin up by zero hero Nov 21, 2003 8:25 PM
Mentor by artguy Nov 18, 2003 1:09 PM
on a walk (PC) by noangel Nov 17, 2003 8:57 AM
under my sneakers by Arcadia Nov 18, 2003 11:38 AM
uh-oh by noangel Nov 19, 2003 8:24 AM
Why? by pottygok Nov 19, 2003 5:39 PM
On a walk (revised) PC by noangel Nov 30, 2003 9:52 PM
waiting for download by luke mcgrath Nov 16, 2003 2:40 PM
first timer.......PC by noangel Nov 15, 2003 12:50 PM
Second image? by pottygok Nov 19, 2003 5:41 PM
I agree by zen_ Nov 23, 2003 3:52 AM
back to drawing board (PC) by noangel Nov 25, 2003 7:32 AM
Haiku Onto You by Dave The Dov Nov 15, 2003 8:36 AM
ku-tistic by zero hero Nov 15, 2003 10:27 AM
metaphorical snow-ku by ellipsis Nov 19, 2003 4:07 AM
kiddie ku by zero hero Nov 23, 2003 2:37 PM
i do know that in my life, i will always, do it the way that makes me happy by Yabyum Nov 14, 2003 7:25 PM
mainstream chai by Andeh Nov 14, 2003 2:01 PM
city fly by Andeh Nov 14, 2003 2:02 PM
coffee high by Andeh Nov 14, 2003 2:05 PM
the smiling eyes of the alley souks (for judih) by Knip Nov 13, 2003 10:40 PM
brass glare finjian stare by judih. Nov 14, 2003 12:21 AM
U.A.E. sandstorm by Knip Nov 13, 2003 10:35 PM
green flash by Knip Nov 13, 2003 10:30 PM
staring into the great blue by Knip Nov 13, 2003 10:26 PM
epiphany while walking the length of my deserted winter boardwalk by Yabyum Nov 13, 2003 6:42 PM
:) by zero hero Nov 13, 2003 10:12 PM
agreed by judih. Nov 13, 2003 10:24 PM
gusts of dangerous wind by Yabyum Nov 13, 2003 6:33 PM
so once again i await a moment that i know is never going to happen.... why not? by Yabyum Nov 13, 2003 6:30 PM
last chance (amost) to join Freestyle by LitKicks Staff Nov 13, 2003 4:56 PM
Death of a smokin' guitar by backpocket Nov 13, 2003 4:02 PM
shafts of sunlight--PC by pottygok Nov 13, 2003 1:05 PM
on the side of spirit by Jimboloco Nov 13, 2003 3:31 PM
I CAN by backpocket Nov 13, 2003 4:04 PM
Day by artguy Nov 13, 2003 10:04 AM
dryer warmed blankets--PC by pottygok Nov 13, 2003 8:18 AM
cozy by Jimboloco Nov 13, 2003 3:35 PM
To clock off by DarkMatta-Legend Nov 13, 2003 7:50 AM
Jack by artguy Nov 12, 2003 7:42 PM
Long Ago And Far Away by backpocket Nov 12, 2003 5:56 PM
infinite haiku , heavy stones... by DarkMatta-Legend Nov 13, 2003 1:53 AM
by the sword by beatvibe Nov 12, 2003 2:09 PM
Autumn Trust Bridge by ARAHH Nov 12, 2003 2:39 AM
called "Daddy" by pottygok Nov 12, 2003 12:21 AM
checking my phone--PC by pottygok Nov 12, 2003 12:10 AM
. by Yabyum Nov 11, 2003 4:30 PM
from The Kids in the Hall by Skyhawk0 Nov 11, 2003 2:08 AM
my alcholic co-worker by Jimboloco Nov 12, 2003 6:09 AM
Microsoft goes Haiku by Umberto Nov 10, 2003 10:33 PM
thank you for sharing that by zero hero Nov 10, 2003 10:42 PM
The pleasure by Umberto Nov 11, 2003 12:42 AM
dude by Jimboloco Nov 12, 2003 6:13 AM
televised vision. by Yabyum Nov 10, 2003 6:54 PM
jerry springer by zero hero Nov 10, 2003 9:49 PM
River by artguy Nov 10, 2003 10:28 AM
11-11@11:11 by Jimboloco Nov 10, 2003 10:25 AM
11-13 @11:13 by Jimboloco Nov 13, 2003 5:35 AM
waking up--PC by pottygok Nov 9, 2003 8:04 AM
... by rain70 Nov 9, 2003 11:48 AM
Oh yeah... by pottygok Nov 9, 2003 8:42 PM
speed bump by zero hero Nov 10, 2003 8:46 AM
Heh! by rain70 Nov 10, 2003 10:37 AM
you know by ~K Nov 11, 2003 12:56 AM
Oh... by rain70 Nov 11, 2003 10:02 AM
frost moon--PC by pottygok Nov 9, 2003 8:03 AM
... by rain70 Nov 9, 2003 11:50 AM
I realize... by pottygok Nov 9, 2003 8:35 PM
ero ku by zero hero Nov 9, 2003 12:03 AM
mt woman by zero hero Nov 10, 2003 9:10 AM
2 out of three by zero hero Nov 10, 2003 9:18 AM
truth by zero hero Nov 10, 2003 9:41 PM
frayed sweater--PC by pottygok Nov 8, 2003 12:49 AM
... by rain70 Nov 9, 2003 11:53 AM
...........i say.............FUCK YOU! by Yabyum Nov 7, 2003 11:22 PM
are you talking to me? by Jimboloco Nov 10, 2003 10:24 AM
WC ventilator by ARAHH Nov 7, 2003 2:06 PM
A Realization in Hell by ~K Nov 7, 2003 2:04 AM
... by rain70 Nov 9, 2003 11:55 AM
she purrs--PC by pottygok Nov 7, 2003 1:02 AM
puuuuurrrrrrr... by LOSTPOET1 Nov 7, 2003 10:13 AM
ultra-early blood rise by ARAHH Nov 7, 2003 12:31 AM
lament by Jimboloco Nov 7, 2003 3:07 PM
nervous karma by ARAHH Nov 7, 2003 3:38 PM
morning coffee--PC by pottygok Nov 5, 2003 11:51 PM
coffee by LOSTPOET1 Nov 7, 2003 10:12 AM
... by rain70 Nov 9, 2003 11:58 AM
KATZ! by shem Nov 5, 2003 9:56 PM
re: KATZ! by pottygok Nov 5, 2003 11:53 PM
four for fuck you by Yabyum Nov 5, 2003 5:52 PM
jerzee by hella Nov 5, 2003 6:04 PM
three for evils sake by Yabyum Nov 5, 2003 5:47 PM
huh by hella Nov 5, 2003 6:07 PM
oh wow, thats two in a row by Yabyum Nov 5, 2003 5:45 PM
woke by hella Nov 5, 2003 6:08 PM
a haiku i've never read because i never wrote. by Yabyum Nov 5, 2003 5:44 PM
#4727 by mtmynd Nov 5, 2003 7:20 AM
#4727 by hella Nov 5, 2003 6:05 PM
#4726 by mtmynd Nov 5, 2003 7:12 AM
#4725 by mtmynd Nov 5, 2003 7:10 AM
#4724 by mtmynd Nov 5, 2003 7:08 AM
haiku by buddhabitch Nov 5, 2003 7:06 AM
can't take the heat by judih. Nov 5, 2003 7:06 AM
hai-there by mtmynd Nov 5, 2003 7:14 AM
when moons eclipse by judih. Nov 5, 2003 7:19 AM
Hai-'er by mtmynd Nov 5, 2003 7:23 AM
high heat by hella Nov 5, 2003 6:10 PM
moment us by buddhabitch Nov 5, 2003 7:36 AM
haiku by buddhabitch Nov 5, 2003 7:03 AM
haiku by buddhabitch Nov 5, 2003 6:50 AM
my-ku in response to thy-ku by judih. Nov 5, 2003 7:17 AM
re-ku by buddhabitch Nov 5, 2003 7:31 AM
wind certainty by judih. Nov 5, 2003 7:34 AM
wind me up by buddhabitch Nov 5, 2003 7:45 AM
bursts of fog--PC by pottygok Nov 5, 2003 12:01 AM
. by Yabyum Nov 4, 2003 4:26 PM
....... by Yabyum Nov 5, 2003 6:02 PM
Nirvana by LOSTPOET1 Nov 4, 2003 1:03 PM
Prayer (a rengay)--PC by pottygok Nov 4, 2003 12:49 PM
wet leaves PC by pottygok Nov 4, 2003 3:10 AM
fogged windows PC by pottygok Nov 4, 2003 3:03 AM
pottygok by sonofthesun Nov 4, 2003 3:22 AM
Im also there. by zen_ Nov 4, 2003 11:36 AM
rengay, renga, etc... by pottygok Nov 4, 2003 12:45 PM
inte'resant by zen_ Nov 4, 2003 7:08 PM
... by pottygok Nov 4, 2003 11:05 PM
Rewrite: smell of jasmine by pottygok Nov 12, 2003 1:06 AM
still clouds PC by pottygok Nov 4, 2003 3:00 AM
nice by zen_ Nov 4, 2003 11:34 AM
upcoming road trip slash vacation to the city of DC by Yabyum Nov 3, 2003 4:25 PM
hazy visions by WIREMAN Nov 3, 2003 4:38 PM
Haiku Onto You by Dave The Dov Nov 4, 2003 11:46 AM
excrementality by sojunsan Nov 3, 2003 4:07 PM
Awakening at the Vampires' Mausoleum by ~K Nov 3, 2003 12:55 AM
Liked this one by SassyKat Nov 12, 2003 1:24 PM
Hey by ~K Nov 16, 2003 12:02 AM
Hi ,~K! by SassyKat Nov 18, 2003 1:29 PM
after the show by shem Nov 2, 2003 7:56 PM
Nov 1, 12:30am by shem Nov 2, 2003 7:29 PM
a bum remembrance by Jimboloco Nov 3, 2003 5:39 AM
SHEM! by zen_ Nov 4, 2003 11:42 AM
holy grail quest by zero hero Nov 2, 2003 6:16 PM
right effort by Jimboloco Nov 3, 2003 5:32 AM
st. jack by zero hero Nov 3, 2003 3:29 PM
shame on me ku by zero hero Nov 14, 2003 9:07 PM
La Mancha by artguy Nov 2, 2003 5:56 PM
El Mancho by Jimboloco Nov 3, 2003 5:43 AM
ghost (edited) by zero hero Nov 2, 2003 5:22 PM
The new VW by Gravydog Nov 2, 2003 12:01 AM
First Impressions of NYC (linked verse) by zen_ Nov 1, 2003 11:52 PM
New VW by Gravydog Nov 1, 2003 11:14 PM
november by snakhi Nov 1, 2003 5:16 PM


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