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ok, so you dig this by Harry Jul 21, 2004 9:42 PM
marginless reversion by 4 degrees Jul 20, 2004 11:18 AM
St. Annie (please critique) by CHILDS Jul 19, 2004 11:02 PM
Said the spider to the fly. (Please Critique) by Chuck Pepsy Jul 19, 2004 1:38 PM
A welcome voice by Billectric Jul 19, 2004 2:04 PM
It begins at the start by Bluebear Jul 20, 2004 10:27 AM
Part VI ... PC on mostly plot for right now , by DocStray Jul 19, 2004 12:55 PM
City Trip (Please Critique) by CHILDS Jul 18, 2004 6:04 PM
very compelling by zen_ Jul 18, 2004 10:59 PM
ZEN by CHILDS Jul 18, 2004 11:02 PM
Ah~ by zen_ Jul 18, 2004 11:30 PM
Thank you - by CHILDS Jul 18, 2004 11:40 PM
(flash fiction) Medal of Honor (Please Critique) by Christ was a Socialist Jul 18, 2004 5:29 AM
not bad... by Jonny Jul 18, 2004 1:55 PM
Soul Debris #3 (Please Critique) by CHILDS Jul 17, 2004 10:46 PM
you really want me to blow dont you? by wonder_woman Jul 18, 2004 9:30 PM
Stop crying WW... by CHILDS Jul 18, 2004 10:56 PM
the secret of miracles by elvin Jul 17, 2004 7:16 AM
Soul Debris II ( Please Critique ) by CHILDS Jul 16, 2004 10:02 PM
This makes me sad by wonder_woman Jul 16, 2004 10:26 PM
I'm sorry... by CHILDS Jul 16, 2004 11:36 PM
critique by jamelah Jul 17, 2004 2:34 PM
Thanks - by CHILDS Jul 17, 2004 3:19 PM
yes, i read it by jamelah Jul 18, 2004 5:41 AM
i must agree... by Jonny Jul 18, 2004 2:12 PM
The True Story of Daisy the Golly Goose by coolazice Jul 16, 2004 7:23 PM
I've got to admit by Billectric Jul 19, 2004 2:08 PM
the very last morning (i'm not sure if this works -- pc) by jamelah Jul 16, 2004 6:52 AM
What this is missing by shamatha Jul 16, 2004 10:46 AM
i didn't get a McEgg connection by judih. Jul 16, 2004 11:16 AM
yes, literally dead by jamelah Jul 16, 2004 11:45 AM
yes by judih. Jul 16, 2004 9:14 PM
thanks, judih. by jamelah Jul 17, 2004 9:44 AM
okay by jamelah Jul 16, 2004 11:29 AM
I guess reading + work by shamatha Jul 16, 2004 12:13 PM
well by jamelah Jul 16, 2004 12:44 PM
You could solve your problem by shamatha Jul 16, 2004 2:42 PM
that's definitely an idea by jamelah Jul 17, 2004 9:43 AM
rhythm is a dancer by firecracker Jul 16, 2004 12:18 PM
it's a soul's companion by jamelah Jul 16, 2004 12:42 PM
(It made me smile) by Arcadia Jul 16, 2004 1:16 PM
hey arcadia by jamelah Jul 17, 2004 9:27 AM
i shouldn't reply by mtmynd Jul 16, 2004 2:21 PM
well by jamelah Jul 17, 2004 9:41 AM
the very last morning (revised) by jamelah Jul 17, 2004 9:23 AM
good - like the part where she's talking to the dead spider by judih. Jul 17, 2004 10:19 AM
got the typo by jamelah Jul 17, 2004 2:43 PM
good bits by Jonny Jul 18, 2004 2:22 PM
hi jonny by jamelah Jul 19, 2004 6:57 PM
“I bet your cold.” by frontal-abstraction Jul 18, 2004 5:57 PM
hey cindy by jamelah Jul 19, 2004 7:00 PM
Wha - ? by Billectric Jul 18, 2004 12:17 PM
hey bill by jamelah Jul 18, 2004 12:36 PM
double post by Jonny Jul 18, 2004 2:23 PM
i like the revised version better... by Billectric Jul 19, 2004 6:27 AM
and just so you know by Billectric Jul 19, 2004 11:06 AM
you could add this paragraph by Billectric Jul 19, 2004 12:47 PM
heheheh by jamelah Jul 19, 2004 6:55 PM
and it only costs by Billectric Jul 20, 2004 5:13 AM
thanks by jamelah Jul 19, 2004 6:56 PM
Waitin’ on a Friend (PC) by frontal-abstraction Jul 16, 2004 5:41 AM
yo, cindy by jamelah Jul 16, 2004 11:11 AM
glad you mentioned by frontal-abstraction Jul 16, 2004 7:16 PM
no examples come to mind by jamelah Jul 17, 2004 9:59 AM
Thank you by frontal-abstraction Jul 18, 2004 9:35 AM
like this a lot by firecracker Jul 16, 2004 7:55 PM
firecracker by frontal-abstraction Jul 18, 2004 9:18 AM
good stuff by judih. Jul 16, 2004 10:47 PM
That’s it by frontal-abstraction Jul 18, 2004 8:50 AM
Soul Debris 2 ( P C ) by CHILDS Jul 15, 2004 10:27 PM
Enhancing each others lives by luckystrikes Jul 16, 2004 2:52 PM
a Pound of Flesh by foolish_Paeter Jul 15, 2004 9:41 PM
this is an overhaul by foolish_Paeter Jul 15, 2004 9:44 PM
Soul Debris ( Please Critique ) by CHILDS Jul 15, 2004 6:54 PM
"She's one of US!!!!"..... by scooter_betty Jul 15, 2004 7:05 PM
Course, by scooter_betty Jul 15, 2004 7:06 PM
Thanks a lot, Scoot. by CHILDS Jul 15, 2004 7:47 PM
My eyes are OPEN.... by scooter_betty Jul 15, 2004 8:08 PM
I have some stuff below that you can read... by CHILDS Jul 15, 2004 8:10 PM
Bring it on! by scooter_betty Jul 15, 2004 8:13 PM
Sit back & relax Betty... by CHILDS Jul 15, 2004 8:18 PM
I like midnight the best..... by scooter_betty Jul 15, 2004 8:20 PM
Ahhhh! I read you online! by scooter_betty Jul 15, 2004 8:21 PM
I was writing midnight, and you edited! by scooter_betty Jul 15, 2004 8:22 PM
I'm no editor... by CHILDS Jul 15, 2004 8:27 PM
No, no, no! by scooter_betty Jul 15, 2004 8:32 PM
Ohhhhh... by CHILDS Jul 15, 2004 8:54 PM
hehe by scooter_betty Jul 15, 2004 8:56 PM
Lacondra by Arunima Jul 15, 2004 11:38 AM
The day I forgot my post-surgical check up (PC) by underabell Jul 15, 2004 9:47 AM
why not by Tulate Jul 15, 2004 11:18 AM
Our Lady on the Hill of Tepeyac by Rosie Jul 15, 2004 6:35 AM
Dowsing in the Cemetary -- comments? by zen_ Jul 15, 2004 12:35 AM
part one ends in brace by judih. Jul 15, 2004 1:12 AM
well, thank you kindly by zen_ Jul 15, 2004 10:28 PM
thanks by judih. Jul 15, 2004 11:38 PM
Soul Debris ( P C ) O.K. guess I'll post some more... by CHILDS Jul 14, 2004 7:53 PM
heh by Holden Jul 15, 2004 4:15 AM
Yes, it does... by CHILDS Jul 15, 2004 1:55 PM
The old man and the egg salad sandwich by Brage Jul 14, 2004 12:49 AM
Nice vignette by Billectric Jul 14, 2004 5:15 AM
Keep at it man by Holden Jul 14, 2004 10:35 AM
thanks guys by Brage Jul 18, 2004 1:03 AM
Part 5 PC with helpful criticism , I'm having a hard time restarting the story. by DocStray Jul 13, 2004 10:01 PM
very interesting... by Arunima Jul 15, 2004 11:55 AM
Sasha is short for Alexander by DocStray Jul 15, 2004 2:01 PM
What's up doc? by CHILDS Jul 15, 2004 2:06 PM
Hard to tell by DocStray Jul 15, 2004 7:01 PM
"Sailfest 2004" (working title) -- Part 1 -- I'd appreciate comments by zen_ Jul 12, 2004 9:48 PM
"sailfest 2004" -- part 2 by zen_ Jul 12, 2004 9:50 PM
"sailfest 2004" -- Part 3 by zen_ Jul 12, 2004 9:51 PM
..... by 4 degrees Jul 13, 2004 7:39 AM
... by judih. Jul 13, 2004 10:14 AM
im drunk, by young one Jul 12, 2004 11:41 PM
"Dustbin Banquet"___ Please Critique. This might be my last post!... by Scone_Dog Jul 12, 2004 10:19 AM
Seems like a play by Steve Plonk Jul 12, 2004 5:08 PM
"Farm Dream "____ This gotta be criteeaked_ a tale written by Mearne (PC) by Scone_Dog Jul 12, 2004 10:15 AM
dealer by elvin Jul 12, 2004 7:26 AM
Man, by young one Jul 12, 2004 11:33 PM
thanks heaps! by elvin Jul 13, 2004 9:49 PM
This is so VERY good! by scooter_betty Jul 13, 2004 5:01 PM
well... by elvin Jul 13, 2004 9:51 PM
I will do that! by scooter_betty Jul 13, 2004 10:24 PM
links by elvin Jul 14, 2004 3:08 AM
Getting there.... by scooter_betty Jul 14, 2004 2:00 PM
occult fishing by elvin Jul 12, 2004 7:25 AM
Nostalgia (Please Critique- This might be my last post!) by CHILDS Jul 11, 2004 11:27 PM
Man, this is an excellent recollection by Billectric Jul 12, 2004 6:48 AM
Thanks Bill... by CHILDS Jul 12, 2004 7:28 PM
No last post by schmoogie Jul 13, 2004 2:32 PM
Thank you, Schmooge... by CHILDS Jul 13, 2004 5:22 PM
A sordid night through the means of an IM (PC) by KHRISTOPHOROUS Jul 11, 2004 8:34 PM
This captures that feeling of by Billectric Jul 12, 2004 6:51 AM
rainy desert (sprawling rant) by young one Jul 11, 2004 3:43 PM
this has by elvin Jul 13, 2004 9:57 PM
Murder in the Mohave by Tulate Jul 10, 2004 8:56 PM
interesting by 2lame2beprez Jul 11, 2004 12:29 PM
please by learned Jul 11, 2004 1:38 PM
yes -- mirages can make you mad by Tulate Jul 12, 2004 5:08 AM
Good story! by Billectric Jul 13, 2004 7:08 AM
was going for the gore... by Tulate Jul 13, 2004 1:28 PM
Good story! by Billectric Jul 13, 2004 7:11 AM
I can't see past the last century by doreen peri Jul 10, 2004 8:49 AM
Outstanding! There IS a book in you. by Steve Plonk Jul 10, 2004 5:16 PM
I don't know about Jesus... by CHILDS Jul 10, 2004 9:53 PM
childs and steve by doreen peri Jul 11, 2004 2:00 PM
Footprints in quickcrete... by Steve Plonk Jul 12, 2004 5:50 PM
how i met Angela by hella Jul 9, 2004 8:20 PM
Way above! by judih. Jul 9, 2004 8:24 PM
i tell you by hella Jul 9, 2004 8:28 PM
energizers by judih. Jul 9, 2004 8:33 PM
Hey Judih! by CHILDS Jul 9, 2004 8:38 PM
okay, done by judih. Jul 9, 2004 9:14 PM
two were by hella Jul 9, 2004 8:45 PM
yeah hebrew slang 101 by judih. Jul 9, 2004 9:13 PM
I explain the "flaw" a little more in the revised version... by CHILDS Jul 9, 2004 9:19 PM
Judih three times by Steve Plonk Jul 14, 2004 6:32 AM
I like by shamatha Jul 11, 2004 9:15 PM
Albert Camus_ nervous discussion by Scone_Dog Jul 9, 2004 12:18 PM
Hmmm... by beat_fan Jul 9, 2004 7:43 PM
Barnyard ___ (Demo) _____ SOONER OR LATER , THIS WILL BE CRITIQUED!!! by Scone_Dog Jul 9, 2004 12:13 PM
There are some good phrases in here. by Billectric Jul 10, 2004 9:16 AM
"Bad Apple Unfinished"____ THIS MUST BE CRITIQUED by Scone_Dog Jul 9, 2004 11:46 AM
Hmmm by Chuck Pepsy Jul 10, 2004 7:40 AM
The Zucchini by rennoc Jul 9, 2004 11:42 AM
zu - keen by judih. Jul 9, 2004 8:21 PM
Start by Istabraq Jul 9, 2004 8:56 AM
If there is going to be a litkicks/9pages Zine.... by ghostofhemingway Jul 9, 2004 5:32 AM
LOL!!! by doreen peri Jul 10, 2004 9:19 AM
Songs For Midnight- final installment ( P C ) by CHILDS Jul 8, 2004 11:11 PM
Much of this I like a lot... by Billectric Jul 9, 2004 6:33 AM
This is part of the Novella I've been posting, Bill - by CHILDS Jul 9, 2004 9:36 AM
Cleaned up and revised by luckystrikes Jul 9, 2004 7:22 AM
I like the fact that you can work off of me so well - by CHILDS Jul 9, 2004 9:43 AM
Thank you.... by luckystrikes Jul 9, 2004 9:49 AM
Sound the mighty "YAWLP"!! by CHILDS Jul 9, 2004 10:04 AM
O' Captain, My Captain by luckystrikes Jul 9, 2004 11:46 AM
how i met Le Tigre. by hella Jul 8, 2004 11:11 AM
yes, sounds like it by luckystrikes Jul 8, 2004 11:16 AM
for some reason by Billectric Jul 9, 2004 6:50 AM
me too! by luckystrikes Jul 9, 2004 7:24 AM
i'm left... by mtmynd Jul 9, 2004 7:36 AM
Turn it upside down.... by luckystrikes Jul 9, 2004 8:12 AM
lol by foolish_Paeter Jul 9, 2004 9:32 AM
The Trouble With Dogs by Istabraq Jul 8, 2004 9:28 AM
Somebody tell me if they like this or not!! by Istabraq Jul 8, 2004 11:48 AM
you are impatient. by HopelesslyHopeless Jul 8, 2004 2:28 PM
I would agree with much of Hopeless's reply by zen_ Jul 8, 2004 10:02 PM
thank you by Istabraq Jul 9, 2004 8:20 AM
being hurt by the one you love by foolish_Paeter Jul 8, 2004 4:17 AM
Im sorry.... by luckystrikes Jul 8, 2004 8:23 AM
i must say by foolish_Paeter Jul 8, 2004 12:27 PM
don't be...wise one! by zen_ Jul 8, 2004 9:52 PM
interesting little ditty, there, fp by Billectric Jul 8, 2004 8:51 AM
i just by foolish_Paeter Jul 8, 2004 12:29 PM
The Study of Life by HopelesslyHopeless Jul 7, 2004 2:57 PM
heh by Holden Jul 7, 2004 10:03 PM
Great story! by Billectric Jul 9, 2004 6:45 AM
The excitment of M+M's on your day off by Harry Jul 7, 2004 11:13 AM
Songs For Midnight - the final installment on this board ( PLEASE CRITIQUE) by CHILDS Jul 7, 2004 9:53 AM
Again, God is the name for Mother from the lips of children !! by luckystrikes Jul 7, 2004 10:36 PM
Lucky... I don't know what to say. by CHILDS Jul 7, 2004 11:07 PM
"I need a compliment" by luckystrikes Jul 8, 2004 8:29 AM
finally by judih. Jul 9, 2004 9:10 PM
repost, not retraction...beautiful cyber love between A and B *CONTENT* by 4 degrees Jul 6, 2004 10:08 AM
hahahaha... by CHILDS Jul 6, 2004 10:32 AM
well, its hard to type with one hand by Holden Jul 6, 2004 5:35 PM
matter of fact, by 4 degrees Jul 7, 2004 8:20 AM
naked exposure by livingston Jul 7, 2004 12:25 PM
yes by 4 degrees Jul 7, 2004 3:15 PM
yes it was ...well you all know... by rennoc Jul 7, 2004 7:13 PM
but by 4 degrees Jul 8, 2004 4:29 PM
Crazy life...in a nutshell by luckystrikes Jul 7, 2004 10:16 PM
matter of fact, again, by 4 degrees Jul 8, 2004 4:27 PM
no need to retract by judih. Jul 7, 2004 8:07 PM
yeah by Holden Jul 7, 2004 9:55 PM
So lucky stands defeated.... by luckystrikes Jul 7, 2004 10:56 PM
you sick bastard.... by KB Jul 8, 2004 9:32 AM
...... by 4 degrees Jul 8, 2004 9:43 AM
perhaps, if we ask nicely, by zen_ Jul 8, 2004 10:38 AM
four degrees! by judih. Jul 9, 2004 7:05 AM
Introduction - ( Please Critique ) by CHILDS Jul 5, 2004 10:36 PM
Maybe by HopelesslyHopeless Jul 6, 2004 12:55 PM
Hey by Holden Jul 6, 2004 5:31 PM
Well it does say Intro. don't it? by CHILDS Jul 6, 2004 11:07 PM
Fine by HopelesslyHopeless Jul 7, 2004 2:28 PM
I realized... by CHILDS Jul 7, 2004 11:12 PM
Dancing at a wedding by rennoc Jul 5, 2004 8:59 AM
paper thin by judih. Jul 5, 2004 7:28 PM
Thank you by rennoc Jul 5, 2004 8:31 PM
not always by judih. Jul 6, 2004 5:52 AM
SONGS FOR MIDNIGHT 3 (PLEASE CRITIQUE) *** by CHILDS74 Jul 4, 2004 11:10 PM
Wow by Hester Prynne Jul 5, 2004 12:06 PM
Thank you, Hester... by CHILDS74 Jul 5, 2004 1:33 PM
Absolutely.... by luckystrikes Jul 7, 2004 10:14 PM
Incendiary Theatre and the work of Natchislawv Porgishneiy (PC) by obmamambo Jul 4, 2004 10:06 PM
This has a fun, wacky feel by Billectric Jul 9, 2004 6:48 AM
hollywood by livingston Jul 4, 2004 8:41 PM
I say go ahead by Hester Prynne Jul 5, 2004 12:14 PM
Go get 'em, LIv! by CHILDS74 Jul 5, 2004 1:44 PM
Have paper and pen, will travel by mise_en_place Jul 5, 2004 8:22 PM
First Date by rennoc Jul 3, 2004 3:26 PM
cool, rennoc by judih. Jul 3, 2004 7:38 PM
Honesty by rennoc Jul 4, 2004 8:52 AM
editor by livingston Jul 3, 2004 12:55 AM
well, as you once told me.. by mnaz Jul 3, 2004 1:49 AM
Thank you, Livingston - by CHILDS74 Jul 3, 2004 9:53 AM
i knows just what it is u r saying to these peeps by KB Jul 3, 2004 4:06 PM
aw shucks by Hester Prynne Jul 4, 2004 1:23 PM
SONGS FOR MIDNIGHT 3 (PLEASE CRITIQUE) by CHILDS74 Jul 2, 2004 9:01 PM
What am I, a lepper? by CHILDS74 Jul 3, 2004 8:38 PM
are you? by judih. Jul 9, 2004 9:05 PM
The excitement of M+M's on your day off by Harry Jul 2, 2004 9:19 AM
The excitement of M+M's on your day off by Harry Jul 2, 2004 9:19 AM
dear estelline (PC) by slog Jul 1, 2004 9:54 PM
SONGS FOR MIDNIGHT 2 - revised (PLEASE CRITIQUE) by CHILDS74 Jul 1, 2004 8:13 PM
okay by slog Jul 1, 2004 10:06 PM
And this is a constructive critique how? by CHILDS74 Jul 1, 2004 10:15 PM
i said what firsty said by slog Jul 2, 2004 8:12 AM
well... by CHILDS74 Jul 2, 2004 8:52 PM
A Limited Saturday by HopelesslyHopeless Jul 1, 2004 6:39 PM
Bitter sweet by susco Jul 3, 2004 12:42 AM
The other side of the fence by mtmynd Jul 1, 2004 2:32 PM
yo yo yo by firsty Jul 1, 2004 2:35 PM
(meant only by firsty Jul 1, 2004 2:36 PM
I love that song! by mtmynd Jul 1, 2004 2:54 PM
ah, perfect by firsty Jul 1, 2004 3:13 PM
(PC) Read this story YOU SWINE............................ by KB Jul 1, 2004 1:52 PM
damn by 4 degrees Jul 1, 2004 2:08 PM
hey man... by KB Jul 1, 2004 2:17 PM
... by 4 degrees Jul 1, 2004 2:22 PM
excellent by firsty Jul 1, 2004 2:22 PM
Im surprised by Holden Jul 1, 2004 3:02 PM
i think by firsty Jul 1, 2004 3:08 PM
yes... by Holden Jul 1, 2004 3:15 PM
well thats the thing by firsty Jul 1, 2004 3:18 PM
thanks by KB Jul 1, 2004 6:22 PM
i think by Holden Jul 1, 2004 3:11 PM
Yeah man by KB Jul 1, 2004 6:20 PM
the movie by foolish_Paeter Jul 6, 2004 8:50 PM
well by slog Jul 1, 2004 10:04 PM
i want to have sex by KB Jul 3, 2004 4:10 PM


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