Your Critique you asked for on Flames.

by RobotGoat

Posted to Action Poetry on 2002-11-05 20:14:00

Parent message is 275771
aside from some misspelling, i liked it. you might as well lose the commas, too, if punctuation ain’t your bag. (i have the same deal)
i like to think what a forest of doors looks like.
I like it. But, it lacks something….something to really make it STAND out.
you asked for it.
now go critique something of mine. :):):):)

Dylan